Argumentative…

This week, we only have 1 workshop, but I think it’s same with 2 workshops. Why? Because the topic that we discussed is difficult. It’s about argumentative paragraph. Almost all of our friends feel difficult to compose that paragraph, including me. I feel difficult to present evidence and opposing argument.

This week my partner is Trias. I don’t know aright whether she composed it in a hurry or not, but it seems like that. There are many sentences must be corrected. For example she misspells beneficial. She wrote it “benefitial”. She also misuses of beneficial. She use beneficial to state noun whether beneficial is adjective. The most important thing that needs to be corrected is her topic sentence. Her topic sentence is “having pet should be a good effect for our healthy”. According to me, it will be ambiguous if we use that topic sentence. Because, it seems that there’s no good effect of having pet while we have already known that there’s negative & positive side of having pet, but only some people realize the positive side. And, the topic sentence should be “everybody should concern the positive side of having pets.” How about you the readers? Leave me your comment, please….

May be Trias’ problem is almost same with me, presenting the evidence and opposing argument. So, she has only 1 point, 1 example, and 1 opposing argument.

together being a good author...

I feel that my writing gets improved, because of this writing class. I really practice to be a successful writer because I have to write 2 paragraphs for this week. Actually it’s not a heavy duty, and it’s enough interesting. But, we need to enhance knowledge before writing. Enhancing knowledge about what we will write and knowledge about how we will write. That makes writing feels difficult, and needs more times.  This week also experiences me to be good editor because I have to review two paragraphs in a week. The first paragraph is Fia’s. It’s a good paragraph because there’s only 1 mistake in grammar. It also has a clear topic sentence, topic, and also concluding sentence. The second paragraph is Aida’s. It’s also a good paragraph because there’s no grammatical error in her paragraph. Overall, I’m happy for this week because I could finish 2 paragraphs in a week. Writing C class really improves my writing.

Where is The Conclusion???

Wow, this week is amazing because we had three meetings in a week. 2 meetings are as usual, and a meeting is as replacement from the previous week. The first meeting is on Monday. It’s held a workshop by discussing cause and effect paragraph. In that workshop I review Lalang’s paragraph. According to me Lalang’s paragraph is good, because it has clear and simple topic sentence. It has 1 effect and 4 causes, so the cause is more dominant than the effect. It also explains every cause in detail. But, unfortunately it doesn’t have concluding sentence.

Going on to the next meeting, it’s on Wednesday. The agenda is presentation. Exactly this presentation is the last presentation. There are 3 presenters, including me for this week. The first is Trias. She presented about explanation paragraph that we thought it’s a persuasive paragraph. What I’ve learned from Trias’s paragraph is that persuasive paragraph has to have something persuaded whereas trias’s paragraph doesn’t have it. It just tells the important of homework without persuading someone to do homework. Then, the 2^nd presenter was me. My paragraph isn’t debatable, because the topic, topic sentence, and the type is clear. But, the form isn’t as a paragraph. So, I have to modify it. The fault is on the placement. Before I modify, the paragraph has many subjects because every sentence is separated by a point. After that, I combine them all into a paragraph. And, it becomes a perfect paragraph. The last presenter is Zakiah. She has a more paragraph than mine. So, nothing has to be debated.

The last meeting for this week is on Friday. The agenda was workshop under the theme “classification”. I held Zakiah’s paragraph. She wrote the classification of rinso liquid. The deficiency is same as Lalang’s paragraph. It doesn’t have concluding sentence.