Argumentative…

This week, we only have 1 workshop, but I think it’s same with 2 workshops. Why? Because the topic that we discussed is difficult. It’s about argumentative paragraph. Almost all of our friends feel difficult to compose that paragraph, including me. I feel difficult to present evidence and opposing argument.

This week my partner is Trias. I don’t know aright whether she composed it in a hurry or not, but it seems like that. There are many sentences must be corrected. For example she misspells beneficial. She wrote it “benefitial”. She also misuses of beneficial. She use beneficial to state noun whether beneficial is adjective. The most important thing that needs to be corrected is her topic sentence. Her topic sentence is “having pet should be a good effect for our healthy”. According to me, it will be ambiguous if we use that topic sentence. Because, it seems that there’s no good effect of having pet while we have already known that there’s negative & positive side of having pet, but only some people realize the positive side. And, the topic sentence should be “everybody should concern the positive side of having pets.” How about you the readers? Leave me your comment, please….

May be Trias’ problem is almost same with me, presenting the evidence and opposing argument. So, she has only 1 point, 1 example, and 1 opposing argument.